Welcome to Hell: Death Train
This is an NSFW, kinky choose-your-own-adventure type of story that's got a few branching paths, and is about 14k words long. Short for this kind of story but I'm more than willing to continue writing for it if people are interested. I am happy to receive constructive criticism as this is one of my first ventures into properly writing NSFW.
All the art and writing is by me, Melaisen! This is actually my Halloween special for 2023!
Heavily inspired by games like Sombreve's "Dawn of Corruption"!
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Advice for standalone version of the game? Firefox seems to have issues starting it...
Oh goodness, I'll have that looked at sometime in the future. Chrome doesn't have an issue with it in my experience, but I'll ask around. Thanks for letting me know!
Have you considered expanding the project, maybe jumping from a twine game to a visual novel? It might help expand the amount of content plus it could be a format that really lets your artistic abilities shine considering the best parts are the cg's
If you ever get interested I know someone who actually develops vn's as a hobby and is looking to find a project to attach to and I can gladly give you his contact info
Counterpoint to this: converting to VN is not always for the better, for multiple reasons. For one, it massively increases the required amount of art and the effort required for a distinct and unified aesthetic,requires a different narration style to work well, and while the potential audience is larger there's a LOT more competition.
Honestly, I've seen too many games lose a lot of their charm in that transition.
I was just asking if you'd be interested but I'll the answer as a no
OH goodness sorry for taking so long to reply, but I don't have any current plans to turn this into a VN. I do want to make one in the future in the same universe, but as for this project, I think it's just a small fun thing to update every once in a while.
The art is so...visually appealing. Beyond even, like, a porn level; the monotone color scheme gets me every time, and the images included with this game are pretty. I almost enjoy them more than I do the game itself.
Almost.
It's ridiculously high quality, and on top of that, it's severely underrated. You, of course, have no obligation to continue updating this, but if you do, I will be delighted.
Aghhh what the hell this is such a sweet comment... Thank you so much! All the support really does make me want to come back to this!
Nice update! It matches the quality of the initial build, and the new demons are cute! Although I do feel like some routes end rather abruptly.
My favorite scene this time around is the body switching one. I was so sad when I reached the end 😢
Hello! I'm glad you enjoyed the update! I am still planning on adding onto it, my tight schedule just forced me to upload this in its current state, but I do want to make up for it soon!
Better small updates than none at all for a year. I'm just glad to see more of this <3
I just finished the game and I loved it 'w'! I love the identity death one lol even though it's short it's super hot. Thamk you Melaisen 'w'
Oh wow! I didn't even realise that it was Melaisen making this game 'w'! I love your art and you should promote your game more on your furaffinity
Could you add pronoun changers to the beginning for both the main characters and others? Having they/them/their be a common pronoun confuses the hell out of me. Having some custom choices is always nice too. Even without that, your writing is really good and I like the different colors for different main branches in the story.
I'm really glad you liked the story! And I'm sorry the neutral pronouns confuse you, I just wanted it to be enjoyed by most audiences so I default to they/them when referring to the main character. Some of the other characters are also nonbinary as well hence the usage of the same pronouns. I'll see what I can do to make things clearer in future updates, but thank you for your input!
This is great!! The writing is VERY hot, and while I usually can go without visuals in text based games, I'm really glad you've included them. You've clearly put a lot of thought and effort into the art as well as the writing, because they complement the writing very well and give the game some identity and uniqueness.
The only complaint I have is that I wish there was more. I agree with the other commenter, we need more daddy Kiko, although I think that scene would be better in first person where you could experience the mental change instead of just observing it. I hope we'll see more of the conductor in the future, he's a swell fella 😉
Thank you for the input, I'm SUPER glad you liked it! With all the positive reception this has been getting, I'd be happy to continue the story!
Can't wait >w<
This was super cool! I can't wait to see you do more stuff like this if you do eventually do more :3
I'd love to do more! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
This is an interesting premise for a game and there's some very hot scenes - I'd love to read more if you decide to make updates. An expansion on the ending where Kiko becomes the dom daddy husband would be cool, it's super hot.
The art is also awesome and has its own distinct style.
I absolutely wanna continue that route! I just had to cut a lot of stuff to get this out on Halloween, but I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for playing!
coolio
Thankies!
this game is very cool. i love the art too
Thank you so much!!!